Story feedback - Doppelgangers and a race against time
Oct 17, 2017 18:47:34 GMT
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Post by Mortifer on Oct 17, 2017 18:47:34 GMT
This story is centered around a homebrew cursed item, a Ring of Doppelganger.
It will be obtained in the stash of an evil wizard after defeating him, one they're just on the verge of fighting. This ring, once worn, creates an exact duplicate of the wearer, but the doppelganger is chaotic evil and will take any opportunity to indulge in murder, theft, and any other destructive activity. The trouble comes from the fact that both the copy and the original will share any damage inflicted on each other, making it impossible to kill the copy without killing yourself.
So the plan is to have this copy start on a rampage in the middle of a crowded city, committing a series of murders and other high-profile crimes. After a certain period of time, the copy will be arrested and sentenced to death, meaning a death sentence for the innocent original. The execution is scheduled for the next day, meaning the player has a very limited amount of time to remove the curse on the ring, which will sever the connection between the two of them. The temples will be unable to provide the service, but they will point the player in the direction of an alchemist who has been rumored to be in possession of a potion that will remove any curse. The alchemist in question, however, is less than receptive. He is being threatened by a local lord to fulfill a large order, one that he cannot retrieve the materials for by himself. He refuses any money offered by the player and instead will only sell them the potion if they agree to return to him with the various components that he needs to fill the order. The components are difficult to come by, making the time given to the player unfeasible, so he will have to resort to intimidation, theft or murder.
This whole arc does require a bit of timing. They will actually RECEIVE the ring while outside the city, I need to make sure that it's only worn once they are in a populated area where the doppelganger can do enough damage around law enforcement to be sentenced to death. I also want to know, given the parameters set, if there are any shortcuts you can think of that may make this whole arc a lot shorter than I intended. If there are any notes you could add to increase the tension or to make the time limit seem more "real", they would be appreciated, and also some extra steps that could be added rather than Jail > Temple > Alchemist > Potion > End.
Thanks!
It will be obtained in the stash of an evil wizard after defeating him, one they're just on the verge of fighting. This ring, once worn, creates an exact duplicate of the wearer, but the doppelganger is chaotic evil and will take any opportunity to indulge in murder, theft, and any other destructive activity. The trouble comes from the fact that both the copy and the original will share any damage inflicted on each other, making it impossible to kill the copy without killing yourself.
So the plan is to have this copy start on a rampage in the middle of a crowded city, committing a series of murders and other high-profile crimes. After a certain period of time, the copy will be arrested and sentenced to death, meaning a death sentence for the innocent original. The execution is scheduled for the next day, meaning the player has a very limited amount of time to remove the curse on the ring, which will sever the connection between the two of them. The temples will be unable to provide the service, but they will point the player in the direction of an alchemist who has been rumored to be in possession of a potion that will remove any curse. The alchemist in question, however, is less than receptive. He is being threatened by a local lord to fulfill a large order, one that he cannot retrieve the materials for by himself. He refuses any money offered by the player and instead will only sell them the potion if they agree to return to him with the various components that he needs to fill the order. The components are difficult to come by, making the time given to the player unfeasible, so he will have to resort to intimidation, theft or murder.
This whole arc does require a bit of timing. They will actually RECEIVE the ring while outside the city, I need to make sure that it's only worn once they are in a populated area where the doppelganger can do enough damage around law enforcement to be sentenced to death. I also want to know, given the parameters set, if there are any shortcuts you can think of that may make this whole arc a lot shorter than I intended. If there are any notes you could add to increase the tension or to make the time limit seem more "real", they would be appreciated, and also some extra steps that could be added rather than Jail > Temple > Alchemist > Potion > End.
Thanks!